A few problems.
There's an obvious attempt by Douglas Messer to cobble together unrelated material. Yes, the stories all do indeed involve spy themes, and some sexual scenes (reading through these I was over-reacting to the potential sexual content from before). But they are only tangentially related to each other. The few stories with the three young people look really great (which is why I chose to share only those), and those stories tie in better.
I think Douglas Messer would have been better off if he stuck to those tales and then added more support material (set up pages, tighter writing connecting the stories).
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